Writers Corner- Posting Your Work

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Hot2na
Writers Corner- Posting Your Work

i came up with this one while making a latte` this morning. i was reflecting upon the ugly green monster in some women and what brings it out.

 

how does it feel to be so rude,
to say things that are mean,
then hide behind food?

how does it feel,
do you think you are keen?
to talk ugly and cheap,
and turn your words green?

how does it feel to be so vile,
to hate and distrust others,
and live in denial?

how does it feel to be so evil,
to act boy tough,
your attempts are so cavil.

 

Tuna ><(((( '> the other white meat! I am Keeper Of The Whip!

supervioletrays
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I love the fact that I had to look up cavil. Haha. I'm not exactly a woman, so....Haha. Its a great poem, though. I love that women hide behind food...Hm. Informative!

---The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had---

Hot2na
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[quote=supervioletrays] I love that women hide behind food...Hm. Informative![/quote]

ever hear the term "comfort food?!

Tuna ><(((( '> the other white meat! I am Keeper Of The Whip!

Hot2na
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every anniversary we exchange an original poem. so i am planning now for this year's. here is what i came up with a few minutes ago:

you light up the floor

when you walk in a room.

its been 20-years,

and you're still my groom!


you are older, more distinquished

yet young and wise.

my heart still melts, when you look into my eyes.


they said it would't last, but baby i've had a blast.

the time.... where has it gone? it sure went by fast.


i would like 20-more,

with walks on the shore.

our love is so strong,

life is never a bore.

 

Tuna ><(((( '> the other white meat! I am Keeper Of The Whip!

supervioletrays
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Aww. This is so sweet. I love it. You used an almost comical rhyme sceme to express your love.

---The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had---

PhOeNiX_OaSiS
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 I like how this stays in the range of being sweet but not overly mushy. Happy 20th by the way!

 

The Truth Is Out There. Trust No One! Deny Everything!

You're upsetting me....on several levels.

bella22
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Short and Sweet, I like it. Maybe I should write one for mr.bella our 3 year is on Saturday and 1 year (married) is Oct. 13th. I'll post it if I get around to it, i'm not very good at poems but I try.

-Pain is weakness leaving the body- USMC OOrah!

Hot2na
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i have a hard time wrapping my mind around rudeness, meanness, and unnecessary hate:

 

why are you in so much pain?

those words you say, you say in vain.

why do you have to be so mean?

the ugliness and hate, its seen.

why do you put up a front?

your chosen words are so blunt.

what is it that you fear?

someone to hold you and call you dear?

now is the time for you to heel.

get rid of fake, and just be real.

Tuna ><(((( '> the other white meat! I am Keeper Of The Whip!

supervioletrays
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I write best when I'm under stress, so here you go. The use of the word slavery is internal and is not meant in any other context then a slave within us. Also edited for language.: Edit: This poem is difficult to explain. Its largly about casting out a useless dream and all the feelings that go with it... And the pain.


Cast out this dream

Fly to the fires of hell

Burn in the melting light

Show your face no more

 

Scre* this batter soul

Outcast it to the dogs

Not a feeling left inside worth life

Fuc* it all

 

Condemn this angel’s life

Heaven shows no love for Satin

Put it in its place, far away

Let no woman see its fight

 

Punish this run away slave

Master controls all function

A thought too far, lost in haze

Beat him to the shell he is

 

Turn away from the man

Nothing more to see

Broken sparrows wings

Tumbling against the wind

 

Wave adieu to this broken heart

Lies no more can reign

Time to wake up and smell the roses

Flowers grow nicely in hell

 

Complete this story

Its final page writ

Walk away, turn your dam* back

The hero slain, evil won, hell only begun

 

Forget what you have seen

Mirrors on the wall shatter away

I’m gone, it’s gone, but here to stay

                                                                        Burning shambles of the soul rot away.

 

 

---The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had---

Hot2na
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[quote=supervioletrays]

Complete this story

Its final page writ

Walk away, turn your dam* back

The hero slain, evil won, hell only begun

[/quote]

closure?

Tuna ><(((( '> the other white meat! I am Keeper Of The Whip!

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