Writers Corner- Posting Your Work

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animestrinity
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Okay... before I post this, in my own defense this was many many MANY years ago... and I was hopped up on cold medicine and in a goofy mood... I just dug this up today and since someone's been bugging me to post... I figure at least with this one I can blame on drugs (LEGAL AND NOT ABUSED lol)

 

Love Sick

That feeling’s creeping up my spine
The chill runs through my veins
Skin so hot it burns to touch
In it’s path, sweat remains
Deny the truth, I can no more
Although that’s what I’d love
To drown myself within the lie
To refuse all of the above
But all dreams must come to an end
And reality’s left in its wake
To face off with my fated luck
But my body cannot forsake
I wish to leave the warm confines
This blanket around me brings
I miss my freedom and energy
Spent on more constructive things
This feeling within me is known too well
And I believe it a waste of time
Its purpose still is unassigned
A virus in its prime
A cure has yet to be found for this
A definition not yet concrete
So now the only option left
Is to give in and admit defeat
I refuse to let this take over my life
I have better things to do
So I let myself suffer through it
Until it infects someone new
I hope it lingers within me not
I hope it makes it quick
I’m sick of being tired
And I’m tired of being sick.

 

 Disclaimer: I'm not one for poetry... the drugs made me do it!

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supervioletrays
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Trinity, this is beautiful.... I simply love it. Thank you so much for finally giving in and posting!

---The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had---

bella22
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Ok so saturday hubby'o'mine and I have our 3 year anniversary (not wedding anniversary, that's in October) and Well I wanted to write a poem for him, i always write him cards so I wanted to do something a lil different, BUT, i SUCK at poetry, this is what I have so far, don't laugh!

 

As I sit here I think of you

No matter what I do I think of you

You’re always on my mind

Privacy, do you mind?

As there is no privacy between you and I

I still feel the butterflies as I stare into your eyes.

 

 

 

-Pain is weakness leaving the body- USMC OOrah!

bella22
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Ok, here is my final Draft, it may not be a 10 but i tried my best, what do you think? Any suggestions?

As I sit here I think of you
No matter what I do I think of you
You’re always on my mind
Privacy, do you mind?
As there is no privacy between you and I
I still feel the butterflies as I stare into your eyes.
 
We’ve gone through thick and thin together
there’s been times where I just want to run away
but this strong love doesn’t let me go away
You’re my best friend, soul-mate, and lover
 
I thank God everyday for bringing you into my life
You’re my other-half husband of mine
 
You always make me smile when I am down
Or make me laugh when you goof around
There’s so much I can write
But it’s just in black and white
I rather let you see it, feel it, and hear it
 
My rhyme may not be the best
So lets just hope for the best
As we both have been blessed.
And I’ll be with you til the end
I love you babe don’t ever forget.

 

-Pain is weakness leaving the body- USMC OOrah!

Hot2na
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[quote=bella22] what do you think? Any suggestions?[/quote]

i can think of 2 quick-good reasons i like it:

  1. its original
  2. its from the heart

so don't change it or ask for "suggestions," because then i wouldn't be you or "yours."

Tuna ><(((( '> the other white meat! I am Keeper Of The Whip!

bella22
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Thanks, I always hated writing poetry in English class because I'm obviously not good at it, but I wanted to do something different this year.

-Pain is weakness leaving the body- USMC OOrah!

supervioletrays
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Never change what comes from your heart?

---The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had---

Wonderland
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K wrote this awhile back...here goes...

 

I feel the music of you and I want to write

songs about you.

I see love, life & comedy all in your eyes-

and I want to always swim & laugh

inside them.

The magic dance of a new tomorrow,

puts a smile on my hope.

The memory of a lingering touch, feeds my

soul and awakens an old feeling.

 

For you, I would sing & dance,

be true and wonderful.

For this feeling I would write a thousand

songs & swim in every drowning pool of

tears.

Deeply, gladly losing myself in the mess

of your hair-

just to be close to you.

 

And I know as I feel the strength of your

heart against mine; as I feel every aching

drum of hope, lust, and fear-

that the music I hear will always guide me

to you.

 

 

"I'm just trying to find a decent melody...song that I can sing in my own company."

Hot2na
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there you are, right on que.

hate, distrust, and angry words too!

i waited a minute, an hour, or more.

but you never showed and i grew bored.

i thought you'd be here yesterday,

my how time flys when you're miles away.

Tuna ><(((( '> the other white meat! I am Keeper Of The Whip!

supervioletrays
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Alone

Empty

Sorrow

Plenty

No one here

An empty beer

Friendship

Lies

Deception

Flight

Longing cries

Deaf sight

Questions

Frustrations

Light

Flight

Nothing left

Why care

Ugly

Stupid

Weak

Died

No wonder

Smart minds

Forget

Turn

Hate

Run

I’m nothing

Despair earned

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